My Comments for WTE drafts

To piggyback off of the previous comments, your points are really good. Maybe give some examples of good leaders and analyze how those leaders could have been better. Some leaders have been deemed "bad" but their leadership qualities are what made their leading efficient.- From What it means to be a good leader

I'm glad you gave us an introduction and explained your motive for joining this class. I agreed with you about things that maybe we could have done in high school, but didn't think of them until graduation. Whew! I really love the way you defined helping the community because those are the ways society usually wants to get involved and help. Many people don't have the funds and materials to give up to help people, but little things are the ones that matter the most. I also agree where you say that abused women are somewhat put on the back burner. Nobody talks about helping them because most of them are afraid to get help. They also feel as though they are not a "victim" of abuse, especially when it is not physical. I have a friend who I think is abused by her lame boyfriend. He's pushed her a few times and messes with her emotions a little too much. Of course, she doesn't see a problem. There are so many people in the world that need help with this. When they search for the help, they should have somewhere to go to get the counseling they need. 5,000 dollars is a lot to go to them, but I'm sure it will be used in a multitude of ways. Maybe they could get the word out to more abused women and they will flock to the help centers. Good way to start! - From Abused Women

I think that you are off to a great start! Since you explained that you have been apart of many non-profit sectors, you should just elaborate on your personal experience. I honestly wish I could give you better feedback, but I am still sketchy on the subject of non-profit organizations. Maybe you should first introduce what non-profit sectors are to your reader. Also give examples of big name non-profits. Your points are good to explain. - From Wanted: Organizations in Need