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I totally agree with this. I feel as though when homeless people know that it is so easy for them to get money out of begging why should they make an effort to be better? i mean they have nothing else to lose so why should they care? Being in the streets and not doing anything is what they're used to. You live in a Country full of opportunities and you're basicly throwing them all away. Even if most of these people have grown up in places where they've seen things most of us don't or have had a bad example from their parents shouldn't that motivate them to be above it and make a better life for themselves? Not fall back into the same steps as their ancestors. Also giving these people money is just facilitating their idea of hard work, we shouldn't award this sort of behavior, instead try to give them a push from a different angle. Family Education and Vocational Training to Prevent Homelessness

Tim, reading what you wrote especially at the beginning how you specify the problem really caught my attention. The way you let us know exactly what the Collins Center does actually makes your whole draft. You have a really good thing going here, especially the part about the funding. The audience wants to know exactly where this money is going to and what this non-profit does. The fact that you also have a breakdown of the processes that will take in this organization is truly great. I think that using specific quotes from this non-profit, from either people who they have helped or who help there might give this essay a little more of an edge! Empowerment through Education (Go Figure)