Boda's remix:

The original essay begins with a definition, then goes into two annecdotes, then a video, then another annecdote - BEFORE the essay really starts ... There's really no introduction to this essay.  Intro, main points, conclusion does not have to be a recipe for every essay, but it is a good guide for your audience to follow where you're going.  An intro can take many forms.  A preface video to set the tone, a poem, an anecdote.  But once you've set your tone, introduce your big idea(s).  What do you want to your audience to get out of your essay?  Give them a heads up in an intro paraphragh or two.

How about instead:

Poop

How Gross National Happiness Could Save the World

The Kingdom of Bhutan had a traffic light, but it made the people upset. They took it out. A police officer replaced it. They don’t have plastic bags in Bhutan, because the people don’t like them. They are getting the idea. They don’t measure their success in GDP they use instead Gross National Happiness (GNH). The small landlocked nation has one of the world’s smallest economies, yet since launching this program of developing the GNH rather than GDP their life expectancy rates have soared to be 20 years higher And yet somehow in 2007 Bhutan ranked as the world’s second fastest growing economy. But how? The answer is simple, happy people fueling a sustainable development; it is a natural no frills, back to the basic, no politician cramming his pockets with money progression. 

Scarcity: when people take more than their environments have to offer.

Man - using globalization as a tool - has created artificial scarcity towards a means of making more and more money.  Unlike Bhutan creating happiness, which in turn, creates productivity - most countries create scarcity.  This model does not address the needs of people, their organic cultures, the environment or even sustainability.  Ironically, the model that takes takes takes is not sustainable in its own growth.  Countries that place money above basic needs of the people are literally knee deep in shit.  Like a virus, it uses up all resources until the host dies and moves on to another treasure to destroy. 

India has a poop problem. Yes, the eleventh largest Economy in the world, the fourth largest Purchasing power parity (PPP) still has people dying from poor sanitation, their most sacred river, the Ganges is jet black from human shit. Many of their people may be starving, dying, swimming in their own excrement but at least their economy is growing. Maybe they should put their employees (people) first.