Scarcity: when people take more than their environments have to offer.
Shouldn't you have a title? To give an idea to your readers there should be one
Your Title & who it's by
This is crucial, because your essay might be amazing but if you don't give your readers an idea of what you are writing about they might not even want to read it.
I sat across a table from a wealthy business owner, listening to him talk about a restaurant he planned to open; “fast service, that’s the key, high volume is the game”. I poked his mind about his franchise, among those questions that came up; “How much do you pay your employees” he laughed in a not-so polite manner; “minimum wage, their job is not difficult”. I must have had an epiphany in that moment. What if the adage about the customer always being right was tossed, what if instead the employee came first, the customer second and the product third. It seemed like the most natural progression; Happy employees mean healthy, hard working individuals, producing the best product they can and promoting the company they “love”.
*I really like this paragraph, especially because it catches your attention and intros into your topic
The Kingdom of Bhutan had a traffic light, but it made the people upset. They took it out. A police officer replaced it. They don’t have plastic bags in Bhutan, because the people don’t like them. They are getting the idea. They don’t measure their success in GDP they use instead Gross National Happiness (GNH). The small landlocked nation has one of the world’s smallest economies, yet since launching this program of developing the GNH rather than GDP their life expectancy rates have soared to be 20 years higher And yet somehow in 2007 Bhutan ranked as the world’s second fastest growing economy. But how? The answer is simple, happy people fueling a sustainable development; it is a natural no frills, back to the basic, no politician cramming his pockets with money progression.
This rapid, uncontrolled progression of some nations is ruining our forests, melting our glaciers and causing global warming.
The Average sea level worldwide is projected to rise up to two feet by the end of this century. Eliminating approximately 10,000 square miles of land in the United States.
Coastal zones are particularly vulnerable to climate variability and change. Key concerns include sea level rise, land loss, changes in maritime storms and flooding, responses to sea level rise and implications for water resources.
Hurricanes in the Atlantic are likely to become more intense as ocean temperatures rise.
------> Okay the way that you use this way of writing, honestly to me it's a bit unorganized and confusing. You might lose some readers in this progress. You have so much information going on at once that someone might get distracted and not continue reading. Make it into paragraphs and if you want you can use quoation points and give examples, that might be easier and keep your readers intact.
So, why is the issue so important? Shit happens right?
Well, obviously, we've all stepped in a warm pile of dog poo walking in our yard, damning our neighbor's canine "Roofus" as we start scraping our shoe off on the pavement, exclaiming "ewww, ewww, gross!" I mean it happens right? I think the worst part by far has to be that disgusting smell, ah geez.... makes you almost wanna gag. Its happened to you, don't deny it, you step in shit, walk into your car, get to work and suddenly everybody is asking if you had an accident. Embarrassed you exclaim hell no! And question who could have just soiled themselves.
But why should we be so repulsed by that earthly aroma of fresh,warm shit. It turns into fertilizer, it can be used as an alternative fuel source we could probably even use it to build homes and buildings (brings on a whole new meaning to a pile of shit, huh?) but seriously, whats so bad about poop!? Why all the disgust, why all the shame when you eat some bad McDonald's and find yourself taking refuge inside your friend's bathroom, attempting to light match after match, flooding the room with Poporui CFC's out of a can.
I overall really like this part of your essay, the way you make it bold and ask a question really catches my attention and makes me want to read what you have to say.
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