This was my first draft. 

I've improved it here.

Problem Statement

Team Pay It Forward (P.I.F.) requests proposals from non-profit organizations who need to improve their grant/proposal writing skills; specifically, Team P.I.F. is interested in assisting non-profits who use in-house, but not sufficiently trained, grant/proposal writers.  Team P.I.F.'s goal is to award the grant to a less established non-profit in order to increase its grant awards when competing with larger, more established non-profits.  Team P.I.F. restricts this grant to non-profits whose mission is to prevent, aid, educate, mentor, and/or create awareness about domestic violence within the Pinellas and/or Hillsborough areas.  Team P.I.F. is especially interested in non-profits who work with teenagers to prevent them from becoming victims or perpetrators of domestic violence.

Team P.I.F. seeks proposals from non-profits who have a track record of preventing domestic violence.  Team P.I.F. encourages the "pay it forward" message and innovative proposals with this ethic will be given priority for the grant.  Priority will be given to organizations who demonstrate preventing domestic violence and include more than one of the missions stated above.  Non-profits that have not received a federal grant of more than $100,000 in the past year will also receive priority status.  Proposals must clearly state how many grant writers are on staff and if none, how the non-profit currently drafts proposals in response to grant opportunities.  Finally, Team P.I.F. believes in maximizing grant dollars.  Priority will be given to organizations with an administrative and fund raising expense rate (AFR) of 20 percent or less, per their latest publicly available IRS Form 990.  Proposals must include documentation for this requirement.

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Very official and very thorough. It seems like you've really narrowed down the criteria for the non profit organizations so that bigger, established ones don't overshadow the others. For a draft, it is very well done. - Ronny

jay's

Problem Statement
Team Pay It Forward (P.I.F.) requests proposals from non-profit organizations who need to improve their grant/proposal writing skills; (How would improvement be measured?) specifically, Team P.I.F. is interested in assisting non-profits who use in-house, but not sufficiently trained, grant/proposal writers.  Team P.I.F.'s goal is to award the grant to a less established (once again how will establishment be measured funding, amount of years, members?). non-profit in order to increase its grant awards when competing with larger, more established non-profits.  Team P.I.F. restricts this grant to non-profits whose mission is to prevent, aid, educate, mentor, and/or create awareness about domestic violence within the Pinellas and/or Hillsborough areas.  Team P.I.F. is especially interested in non-profits who work with teenagers to prevent them from becoming victims or perpetrators of domestic violence.

Team P.I.F. seeks proposals from non-profits who have a track record of preventing domestic violence.  Team P.I.F. encourages the "pay it forward"(probably will have to expand on what pay it forward is) message and innovative proposals with this ethic will be given priority for the grant.  Priority will be given to organizations who demonstrate preventing domestic violence and include more than one of the missions stated above.(kind of seems like the same sentence as the first one) Non-profits that have not received a federal grant of more than $100,000 in the past year will also receive priority status.  Proposals must clearly state how many grant writers are on staff and if none, how the non-profit currently drafts proposals in response to grant opportunities.  Finally, Team P.I.F. believes in maximizing grant dollars.  Priority will be given to organizations with an administrative and fund raising expense rate (AFR) of 20 percent or less, per their latest publicly available IRS Form 990. (yay way to be specific because I have no idea what your talking about, but their grant writer should, and if they dont this grant may need to go to them)  Proposals must include documentation for this requirement.

not really much today, I personally feel this is written better than a couple of the ones I read. I do feel that it's kind of written towards our classroom and not strictly towards the organizations.-Aberlyna Danelle <3